- shrugged
- rolled eyes
- sighed
- nodded
I'm sure I'm not the only one to use mannerism cliches in the first draft, but I certainly don't want to keep them in the final draft. So how to get rid of them?
After scouring over my story, I took out a lot of the character movements and tried to convey their emotions through dialogue. When a section became too dialogue heavy, I tried to find another way for the character to manifest his/her feelings. What else could a person do besides roll eyes, shrug, etc.?
The only way to find out was to people watch. I spent a day at work playing close attention to my co-workers, noting when they seemed annoyed or excited. Some cliches are real - people DO shrug, roll their eyes, etc., but they also might scratch the back of their neck if they're feeling cornered, glance around the room if they're annoyed, etc.
Take a look. You might find a new way for your character to move.
PS - Nick Harrison has a great post about mannerism cliches here.
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